When I asked my non-writer friends to describe their favorite characters, I got two kinds of answers:
- Simple, one word descriptors: “He’s clever. She’s funny.”
- Detailed explanations of what the character looks like.
But if we’re being honest, most non-writers don’t truly understand why they like a character. Only the broad, blurry strokes.
So how do you learn the writing secrets to better character descriptions? How do you describe the kinds of characters that keep readers hungry for more?
Here, I’ve collected the 12 most powerful character description tools from some of the best authors.
Try these out and you will immediately upgrade your ability to write living, breathing characters of all levels…
1. How Character Description Instantly Makes a Story Great
The Harry Potter novels were stuffed with outstanding examples of character description.
Here’s the very first one: “The Boy Who Lived.”
That’s the title of the first chapter – the very first words you read after you open the book. Imagine if Rowling had started the book with a chapter titled “The Boy with Black Hair and a Lightning Bolt Scar” instead.
Good character description allows you to do more than talk about your character’s physical attributes…
It lets you make the ultimate promise to your readers. “This character is supercharged with dramatic tension. Keep reading, and I promise to unveil their destiny.”
Example from N. K. Jemisin’s The Fifth Season:
“Imagine that his face aches from smiling. He’s been smiling for hours: teeth clenched, lips drawn back, eyes crinkled so the crow’s feet show. There is an art to smiling in a way that others will believe. It is always important to include the eyes; otherwise, people will know you hate them.’
2. When is the Best Time to Describe Your Characters?
As soon as you put a character into the story, an invisible clock starts to tick. The longer your readers go without “seeing” your new character, the more disconnected from the story they become.
Descriptive text is the gravity of that keeps us grounded in your world.
So, describe your characters at the first organic opportunity.
“Save the best for last” is awful advice for writers.
You don’t have time. You don’t have our attention to save your best for last.
Start with the most unique, differentiating visual aspect to your character. For example, nobody refers to Captain Hook as “the pirate with the feather in his hat.”
When your main character enters the story, you want your readers to know immediately that something is different. Something is out of place…
Example from V. E. Schwab’s Vicious:
“VICTOR readjusted the shovels on his shoulder and stepped gingerly over an old, half-sunken grave. His trench billowed faintly, brushing the tops of tombstones as he made his way through Merit Cemetery, humming as he went. The sound carried like wind through the dark. It made Sydney shiver in her too big coat and her rainbow leggings and her winter boots as she trudged along behind him. The two looked like ghosts as they wove through the graveyard, both blond and fair enough to pass for siblings, or perhaps father and daughter.”
3. How Much Description is Too Much?
One writing mistake I see newer writers make too often: too much character description.
Avoid the police report: “He had green eyes, long black hair, pale skin, about 135 pounds.”
Avoid the mirror scene: “She stood in front of a mirror, and this is what she saw…”
The true skill lies in quickly adding visual depth to any character. This is especially important in stories with large casts… because most physical attributes will be forgotten.
Start by describing the character aspects that:
- Make your character uniquely identifiable
- OR generate immediate conflict
Example from Brandon Sanderson’s The Way of Kings:
“The king shone in his golden armor, one of the finest suits of Shardplate in Alethkar. Gold-trimmed with sunbursts on the shoulders and breastplate, the armor was topped by a helm mounted with four intricate spikes. Yet, majestic though it was, the armor looked wrong on the young king. Dalenar still expected a different face to look out from that helm—a face aged with wisdom, not young and untested.”
4. Make Your Characters Move
You don’t need to stop everything to introduce a new character.
Keep the momentum flowing.
Show us what they look like when they move. Pair up your descriptions with verbs, and watch your character come to life.
Example from Dan Brown’s The Da Vinci Code:
“…the hulking albino named Silas limped through the front gate of the luxurious brownstone residence on Rue La Bruyere. The spiked cilice belt that he wore around his thigh cut into his flesh, and yet his soul sang with satisfaction of service to the Lord.”
5. How to Describe (without Describing)
A reader’s imagination is a powerful tool, and you can tap into it by focusing on the mannerisms and the personality of your character. Use these to skip past mundane descriptions of hair color, eye color, etc.
What does Crake look like to you in the example below?
Example from Margaret Atwood’s Oryx & Crake:
“He was annoyed with himself for jabbering and capering, while Crake gave him brief, indifferent glances, and that one-sided demismile. Nevertheless there was something about Crake. That kind of cool slouchiness always impressed Jimmy, coming from another guy: it was the sense of energies being held back, held in reserve for something more important than present company.”
6. Get Your Clothes On!
What your characters wear, and what they carry with them, says plenty about who they are – and where they’ve come from.
Objects also make it easier to imagine the character as a real person, handling a real thing.
Example from Stephen King’s The Gunslinger:
“Below the waterbag were his guns, carefully weighted to his hands; a plate had been added to each when they had come to him from his father, who had been lighter and not so tall. The two belts crisscrossed above his crotch. The holsters were oiled too deeply for even this Philistine sun to crack. The stocks of the guns were sandalwood, yellow and finely grained. Rawhide tie-downs held the holsters loosely to his thighs, and they swung a bit with his step; they had rubbed away the bluing of his jeans (and thinned the cloth) in a pair of arcs that looked almost like smiles. The brass casings of the cartridges looped into the gunbelts heliographed in the sun. There were fewer now. The leather made subtle creaking noises.”
7. Exaggerate Your Descriptions with Shocking Emotions
Make your readers breathless with the first look at your characters.
Be poetic. Exaggerate the ordinary. Tap into the deepest, strongest emotions for your characters.
Example from J. R. R. Tolkin’s The Fellowship of the Ring:
“The face of Elrond was ageless, neither old nor young, though in it was written the memory of many things both glad and sorrowful. His hair was dark as the shadows of twilight, and upon it was set a circlet of silver; his eyes were grey as a clear evening, and in them was a light like the light of stars.”
8. Foreshadow Their Futures
Every physical attribute of your character can tell us about their future.
The goal is to leave the door open – just a little – so that a million questions can fly inside.
Here’s an example where the author uses description to foreshadow the dark turn this story is about to take…
Example from Haruku Murakami’s Kafka on the Shore:
“My sister’s looking off to the side so half her face is in shadow and her smile is neatly cut in half. It’s like one of those Greek tragedy masks in a textbook that’s half one idea and half the opposite. Light and dark. Hope and despair. Laughter and sadness. Trust and loneliness.”
9. Be Unpredictable
Predictable is boring.
When it serves the purpose of your story, it pays to misdirect your audience. Look at this next example to see how J. K. Rowling kept her early readers guessing.
Example from J. K. Rowling’s Harry Potter and the Sorcerer’s Stone:
When we first meet Harry Potter, his life is miserable. He lives under the thumb of his abusive uncle and aunt, and must constantly avoid the tyranny of his cousin.
When Harry finds a spark of hope – a letter inviting him to leave this world – his uncle shreds it to pieces.
There is no hope for Harry. So when this grizzled giant shows up on the doorstep, looking for Harry, we know to expect the worst:
“A giant of a man was standing in the doorway. His face was almost completely hidden by a long, shaggy mane of hair and a wild, tangled beard, but you could make out his eyes, glinting like black beetles under all the hair.”
But J. K. Rowling must’ve smiled while writing Hagrid’s introduction because this terrifying giant is Harry’s knight in shining armor.
Keep your readers on their toes. Be unexpected.
10. Use Description to Add a Captivating Atmosphere
As readers, we want to be locked into the frame of your story. We want to breathe in the air of your world, and to forget we’re reading a book.
Your tone, the setting, everything about your world must be immersive.
Even your character descriptions can add layers of atmosphere to your story.
Example from Neil Gaiman’s Neverwhere:
Neverwhere takes place in a gothic fantasy world underneath London. Despite the darkness, It’s also hysterically lighthearted.
Look at how the author imbues his character descriptions with this unique tone. This passage is an introduction to the two most dangerous characters in Neverwhere:
“There are four simple ways for the observant to tell Mr. Croup and Mr. Vandemar apart: first, Mr. Vandemar is two and a half heads taller than Mr. Croup; second, Mr. Croup has eyes of a faded china blue, while Mr. Vandemar’s eyes are brown; third, while Mr. Vandemar fashioned the rings he wears on his right hand out of the skulls of four ravens, Mr. Croup has no obvious jewelry; fourth, Mr. Croup likes words, while Mr. Vandemar is always hungry. Also, they look nothing alike.”
11. Describe Characters Through Your Narrator’s Voice
Who is describing all these characters in your story?
- A disembodied voice?
- Another character in your story?
When you filter your descriptions through a specific person’s thoughts… you pack twice as much meaning into every word.
Not only does it tell us about the character being described… It also speaks volumes about the Narrator – how they think, how they treat others, or how they deal with conflict.
Example from David Sedaris’s That’s Amore:
Like the rats that spilt from the gangway, she was exactly the type of creature I’d expected to find living in New York. Arrogant, pushy, proudly, almost fascistically opinionated, she was the person you found yourself quoting at dinner parties, especially if your hosts were on the delicate side and you didn’t much care about being invited back. Helen on politics, Helen on sex, Helen on race relations: the response at the table was almost always the same. ‘Oh, that’s horrible. And where did you know this person from?’
12. The Final Secret
This is the most crucial secret.
This is the secret that separates the professional writers from the eternally aspiring amateurs.
Some new writers spend months dreaming up their characters. They conjure up lists of attributes until they map out every inch of a character. They might even spend weeks drawing their characters by hand.
This is a great way to never finish your story.
Dreaming is a necessary part of the writing process. But it is only one, small part.
Discover Your Characters by Using Them
Don’t write about your characters. Write through them. Put them into a story as soon as you possibly can.
You may not understand why that character’s hair-color matters until Act 2. You may not realize that your Hero is left-handed until the final battle.
By seeing your characters in action…
…you will fuly understand them. There is no other way.
Get to writing =)